Tuesday, April 26, 2016

Writing recounts

The Grade 4 students wrote a recount last week. They have been editing and adding more description, making it more interesting to the reader.

Tomorrow they will write an end of year recount piece in class using all the skills we have been practicing.


Here are a few examples of the students creative writing. 



I was finishing the last keys & chords before the big concert. A minor,g, f, a, f,a, b, c and the last chord B minor. I felt amazing. All my practice had paid off. It was like a great weight lifted off my shoulders.


“Perfect Tommy” says my teacher Ms Jane “Gosh it’s already time, so run along now”.
I burst out of the room and sprinted down the stairs with a smile as big as it could get and said to my mom “ Ms Jane said that my piano skills were perfect on that song.” Mom smiled and said “ That’s great, now let’s go home and see your brothers”. I felt excited and proud of myself.


The next day I climbed into the car. As my mom started the car she said " off we go". It was a long dusty ride to the far new campus. I looked out the window as we drove to school.I could see all the construction as we drove along the dirt road. I felt nervous and wondered why I had signed up for this.


When we arrived at school I stepped out of the car. I was greeted by a huge gust of wind and dust. I covered my face and ran into the safety of the school. I looked around. I could see the new buildings and more construction. I could hear pounding and grinding in the distance. As I walked into Building B I started to feel nervous like I had never felt before. My teeth started chattering and my stomach was churning.
I waited a long minute for my mom to catch up.


I walked down the hallway to where the performers were sitting and waiting . I sat quietly on a plastic chair. I was looking neat and tidy in my short sleeved button down top and pants. I looked out across at the rows of lockers. I could taste spit.


After a couple of minutes it was my turn. I slowly stepped on to the stage. Beads of sweat were dripping down my face and my teeth were chattering.


I moved the micro-phone higher so it was close to my face. I pulled it higher, higher until it reached my face and then it hit me. I felt the urge to laugh. I burst out laughing straight into the microphone. I could hear laughter screaming back at me.


I looked out into the audience and saw my dad burying his face in his arms. I felt embarrassed.


I turned around, took a deep breath and sat at the piano.


By Tommy


‘Can’t laugh……..’
‘Hahahahahahaha’ I bursted out laughing with my sister. It was an inappropriate moment to laugh.


It was that time of that time of the year we need to do blessings. We went to Kampot as always and the road was really dusty and red. I played with my sister in the car to kill time and then finally we were there.


I sat to the side and played with my phone and took photos because I didn’t feel like to greeting or talking with anyone. I could see my mother speaking with a group of relatives. I could hear loud chattering and looked down at my lap. I was bored.  


After lunch I saw a group of Elders marching into the house. Dirt was floating everywhere. It was time for the blessing to begin. The monks had arrived.


The Monks started the blessing. I just remembered that there was a funny word in the blessing which was k'chami ( ka-cha-mee). It sounded like fried noodles in Khmer. The monk said it again at the exact moment I was thinking about it.


All of a sudden I had the urge to laugh! I was telling myself 'don't laugh'
I stared deeply into my sister's eye and I regret it immediately but it was too late because I bursted out laughing. I put my hand over my mouth but my laughter bubbled out.


I felt the starring of the Elders burning into me slowly. I saw red faces and frowns everywhere I looked. I could hear a voice inside my head blaming myself. I could smell bad breath everywhere. I knew they were angry at me. I looked down and hide my face so they couldn’t see me.


Finally they finished the blessing. I was very quiet and feeling a little bit nauseous. My mum handed out things to old people, I asked her rapidly to go home but she ignored me. I think she was still cross. I felt the sweat dripping drop by drop down my head.


I waited patiently and finally it was time to go home. I got into the car and closed my eyes. I was replaying the moment again and again in my eyes. I was really embarrassed.


That was when I decided that I will never go to a blessing ceremony again.


By Lyka


I was in trouble. My face crumpled. I was sad. My mouth slowly came down. I looked at Sophia. Sophia was wiggling her mouth. Suddenly I feel the tickle in my body, my legs were shaking.  I was about to laugh but I held it in. My face was red. I looked at Sophia again, then at my Chinese teacher.


My teachers eyebrows went down, the steam started to come out of her nose.  Her eyes were red like lava.


Sophia was shaking the board teek ee teek ee. I couldn’t hold it in any longer and I laughed out loud.


Sophia was holding her laugh with a smile but then she laughed too.


I looked at the teacher she made a grumpy face I put my hand up to my face to hide my smile. My dimple went up and then the teacher glared at me. I took a deep breath but I started to spit and laughed out loud again.


My Chinese teacher said "stop it stop it ". This set Sophia and I off again. We couldn’t help but laugh because she talks like a fancy person in Chinese. The teacher said in a fancy sound "if you don't stop laughing I will tell your father". Sophia put her hands up and said okay. I bit on my lip and looked down to calm myself and the laughter went away.

THE END



The poke
It all started when I was sitting in class getting ready to take a math test.


My teacher had just passed out the papers. I was about to answer the first question, but then but then I felt a poke in my side.


I turned to my side but all I saw was Jayco working on the test, so I went straight back to the test and answered the 1st, 2nd, and 3rd questions.


But then I felt another poke! I felt it as is slowly went into my side. So then I quickly looked to the side and I saw Jayco slowly put her finger to her side then give me a evil smile. I laughed a little. I tried to keep it in. I covered my mouth with my hand and looked back at the Math question. But ...


My mouth started to twitch and I burst out with laughter. I tried to close my mouth but I started to snort. I looked up and saw everyone turn to look at me. There was complete silence. I felt nervous and looked towards the teacher.


The teacher called my name she said “Shelby stop laughing and come here and sit by my desk”. My heart was pounding, my hands were sweaty. Everyone was watching me as I stood up. I slowly walked towards the chair near my teacher's desk. As I sat down I gave Jayco a glare and then started to work on my math again.


By Shelby


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