Descriptive writing

The Grade 4 students have been writing interesting starts for their descriptive / narrative writing pieces. They put their ideas together today and published the first paragraph and started writing the second paragraph describing an emotion.

First Snow.

It was the end of the winter holiday. It was the late morning. It took about half an hour. The strong, bright light came from the burning sun was coming through the window. I heard birds chirping and dogs barking.

Through the window I saw the softly falling snow.

I smelt the soft breeze of the snow.

Me, my mum, sister and grandparents were there celebrating the snow.

Now my thinking changed It made me not interested ever again it was a dream come true. I was not tired anymore.

The cold wind was blowing softly through the air.

The snow instantly started to melt as soon as it fell on our hands or the ground.

The soft breeze kept on tickling my cheeks. I smelt the plain white snow falling everywhere, on the ground, on my head or on my hands (basically everywhere).

I saw snow disappearing from the ground, I was able to

Hear the footsteps of my family.

By Jae Yong

I remember my Christmas.

My dog and my home.

In  autumn last October

It lasted until I came here.

It happened When  I was in Finland

Temperature; freezing and very cold

Background noises dog barking birds noises and wind noises

Smelling home-made cookies that my mom just cook out from the stove.

By Silja

It was the 25th of December christmas day, It was early in the lovely morning.

Opening my gift only took me seconds,  The light was coming from the burning sun.

The weather was windy but also sunny.

I could hear my dad stirring in bed in bed and the gentle rippling of paper.

I could smell  breakfast already out in the kitchen.

I was all alone,, my family were all sleeping soundly.

I was not grumpy, I was no longer loud.

By Stirling

Trip to Australia

It was July in Australia. It was winter

It was late morning when the driver picked us up.

After a half an hour driving we arrived

The light was shining from the sun, there was no clouds in the sky.

It was dry but it was freezing cold.

I heard lots of animal noises.

I could smell animal poop and different types of food.

My relatives were there with me.

I saw a kangaroo for the first time a real one. I was no longer scared of kangaroos.

The kangaroo was as tall as a Toyota Camry, and looked strong.

He had powerful legs and small hands. His eyes looked red. He looked angry.

By Keith