Editing and improving writing

The Grade 4 students worked on the first draft of their writing today.
They used the class checklist to see which items they had dome well and which could improve.
They then added more descriptive detail and finished their second draft.

CHECKLIST / EDIT  CREATED BY MS ALISON’S G 4 CLASS

Include 5Ws in the introduction - who, what, where, when, why
Use (time) connectives to connect parts of the text - on the weekend, eventually, next, finally
Use past tense - walked, swam, drank, fell
Include adjectives to describe what happened generous, clever, daring, bold
List events in the order they happened
Use correct punctuation (full stops, commas, exclamation marks)
Use correct grammar
Correct spelling when you edit
Use paragraphs to break the writing into sections
Try to start with an interesting sentence that will make readers want to read on.

2 things I have done well in my first draft …….

1 thing I can improve ……….

The students then considered hooks / sizzling starts. 

The students found books in the classroom with sizzling starts. 

They selected one they thought was interesting and shared it with the class.